Tuesday 1 November 2011

Complex Sentences

Today during our Crafty Crew writing session we worked on developing our simple sentences into more complex sentences, in order to add more detail to our writing and make it more interesting for our reader.

E.g The puddles covered the asphalt. (simple sentence)

Complex Sentences:
The puddles, filled with muddy brown water, covered the asphalt. (Lochie)
The puddles, shimmering in the sunlight, covered the asphalt. (Mac)
The puddles, sparkling in the grey light, covered the asphalt. (Jessica)
The puddles, filled with murky water, covered the asphalt. (Keegan)
The puddles, that were crystal blue, covered the asphalt. (Rylee)
The puddles, overflowing from the constant sheet of rain, covered the asphalt. (Sam
The puddles, which were filled to the brim with rainwater, covered the asphalt. (Lachlan)
The puddles, left by the heavy grey clouds hanging on the horizon , covered the asphalt. (Autumn)


The fat man fell down the cliff and his house fell on top of him.
The fat man, who was tied to his house, fell down the cliff and his house fell on top of him. (Lachlan)


The apples were on the tree.
The apples, which were scarlet red, were on the tree. (Melissa)


The pole was standing up.
The pole, that the lights lit up on, was standing up (Mac)


The horses galloped down the track carrying their light riders.
The horses, young and full of excitement, galloped down the track carrying their light riders. (Jessica)


The crystals were beautiful.
The crystals, that were shining white, were beautiful. (Rylee)


The black motorbike climbed up the hill.
The black motorbike, sprayed thin sheets of mud as it climbed up the hill. (Keegan)


Rugby is my favourite sport.
Rugby, the best sport in the world is my favourite sport. (Lochie)


The apples were on the tree.
The apples, glistening rosy red, were on the tree. (Sam)


I ran through the trees.
I ran, with ideas ideas racing through my head, through the trees. (Autumn)

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